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SAFETY SHOCK

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Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers ~ Writing challenge week 6. The goal is to write a story between 100-150 words (give or take 25 words) based on the provided photo.

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Thank you Vanessa Rodriguez for this week’s prompt photo.

SAFETY SHOCK

by John Yeo

We live at the top of a very steep hill in the centre of town. Although the crime rate in this locality is low, Father had fitted a burglar alarm above the door, clearly visible from the road and we had a steel gate in front of our front door. Our neighbours in this very quiet road had never been burgled, always smiled at Father’s over-enthusiasm for security.
I will never forget the night of the break-in. There was a sound of breaking glass from the rear of our house, Father went to investigate carrying a baseball bat and he was quickly overpowered by three men wearing balaclavas. Mother and I hid in the bedroom, she had called the police who were on the scene in minutes, sirens blaring and lights flashing. The robbers fled, having tied Father up, and escaped with nothing.
From that day, although our security is strong, we have never felt safe in our house again. Our private space was irreparably violated.

(167 Words)

Copyright (c) Written by John Yeo ~ All rights reserved.

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18 thoughts on “SAFETY SHOCK

  1. I’ve heard people who’ve been burgled saying they’d never feel secure again, whether violence was involved in the crime or not. We all need to have a safe and private space and you’ve captured your characters’ sense of loss in that regard well, John. 🙂

  2. It’s very sad to know that the family didn’t feel safe in their own home after the incident. You described the emotions of the characters very well and made me feel their fear of living there. Nicely done 🙂

  3. Excellent John! Being the victim of many thieves, I know the sad feeling of losing the feeling of safety (and privacy) in your own home. What is even worse is when you find out that people that you love and trust are behind it. Your story certainly embodied that feeling.

    • Thanks Joy ~ I focused on the first house on the right that actually has a burglar alarm and a steel gate, then the whole story flowed from there ~ I agree there is nothing worse than a violation of personal space ~ Thanks again for your wonderful prompts ~ 🙂

  4. Thanks for writing about this. It is so true in real life; our home has been broken into on two different occasions and there is such a feeling of insecurity when this happens. Fortunately, we were not at home, but it takes a long time to get over just the thought of someone violating our personal space. Locks and alarms do not always keep you or your possessions safe from thieves.

  5. Thank YOU! luckyjc007 ~ for reading this and for your great comment ~ I have a great deal of sympathy for you having suffered these sort of effects twice. ~

  6. I’m sure I’ld feel the same way too. Personally haven’t experienced it, but a close friend of mine has had their house attacked by robbers twice.
    I’m glad in the stories, the robbers didn’t get away with anything!

  7. John, I wanted to take this opportunity to once again thank you and tell you how happy I am that you are a wonderful part of the FFfAW weekly challenge writers’ group. I love reading your stories and you bring a special element to the mix of writers. I hope you will continue and I look forward to reading your future stories. PJ

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