Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers ~ Writing challenge. The goal is to write a story between 100-150 words (give or take 25 words) based on the provided photo.
This week’s photo prompt is supplied by Dawn M. Miller
IN A MONASTERY GARDEN
by John Yeo
The gazebo stood in a monastery garden. The wooden structure was aged and set in a copse. The trees in early winter were leafless and there was a thin coating of early snow on the roof. Silence reigned as the monks were at prayer.
A man appeared from the north side of the gazebo carrying an oblong case marked with the name Brother George in capital letters. Then with a cheerful greeting two other men approached and climbed into the gazebo from the east and the west sides, Brothers John and Paul arrived together. Another man arrived from the South side and began to set up an impressive set of drums. “Hi Friar Ringo!” Was the cry from the others and the quartet was complete.
The hallowed silence was broken irreparably as the music drew many young people. The monks were stunned, although one or two were observed swaying to the loud musical beat. Tents sprang up everywhere as an illegal rave began. A collection of money from the fans was donated to the monastery.
(175 words)
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What a lovely story! I loved that the collection of money was given to the monastery.
Thanks Joy ~ I had a little fun this week with your great prompt ~ Thanks for providing the inspiration ~
Your welcome John, and thank you for participating and for writing another great story!
Sounds like my kind of monastery… Well done on the title, as well – I have to admit I only got it when I came across Brothers John, Paul, George and Ringo, though 🙂
Thanks Sonya ~ Those four names together brought the whole thing together ~ Thanks for your great comment ~ I’m glad you enjoyed this ~ 🙂
What a second. ..I thought the walrus was Paul. He’s really a monk?! Did I have a Norwegian wood experience? Seriously well done.
Thanks very much for your great comment, any1mark66. I am the walrus moustache with a monks habit 🙂
What a great idea and who doesn’t love the Beatles reference.
Thanks Donna ~ A timeless reference that is very familiar to all ~ I’m glad you enjoyed this post ~ 🙂
John and George were with them in spirit. Perhaps, a reunion tour of the fab four (John and George with them in spirit). The Monks on Tour ( as way to introducing a new generation to the Beatles!) Great story!
Wow! phylor ~ What a picture for the imagination to conjure with! ~ I’m glad you enjoyed this story ~ Thanks for your interesting comment ~ 🙂
Hee, fun 🙂
I gleefully love your response Ali 🙂
This is a very interesting and creative story. I like how the rave springs up and donates money.
Thanks Mandibelle ~ I am glad you enjoyed this post 🙂
What a fun story! I love the names and the fact that an illegal rave happens in the monastery grounds! At least the money from it is donated to the monastery. Well done. 🙂
You did a nice job of setting up the scenery in the beginning.
Thanks for your support Vanessa ~ I’m glad you enjoyed this 🙂
That was a really fun read, John. The names of the monks are oddly familiar, and to have a rave in a monastery is such a deliciously naughty idea. 🙂 Those monks knew something about raising a bob or two though. Great story 🙂
Thanks Millie ~ That was fun to do ~ Glad you enjoyed this 🙂
Leave it to those four to do something like this. Scandalous! 😉
Anything is possible by four wayward millionaires and Dawn ~ 🙂
Wonderful, John! They went through that sort of ‘monastic experience’ so I can picture this scene. You did a great job describing the setting.
Ellespeth
Yes they did Ellespeth, I hadn’t thought of that when I wrote this. Thanks for commenting
Excellent job! I like how you’ve incorporated the four Beatles into your story. Great description and even the monks couldn’t help but be inspired by the music!
Thanks Jesse ~ I’m always pleased to receive your valuable feedback.
I liked the sense of humor and the way it was subtly inserted into this positive concert with proceeds going to the monastery. Great and enjoyable short story!
Thanks again ~ I am sure a situation that was not fictional would have had a good result ~I’m glad you enjoyed the story reo. Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this ~ 🙂
I’m really laughing at your story. The Beatles as monks. WOW! 🙂
Thanks Susan ~ Great to feel your laughter ~ Thanks for the great comment 🙂